comments & critiques are welcome!!!

hello!!!this is my second post and i have figure it well..^^ hehe..instead of writing boring essay for my blog,,i'm going to write poem in a way to express what i have inside my heart..however, there is no guarantee that it will be fun though..hehe..i'm trying my best here.heh!..here we go..^_______^

saat aku terbaring lesu..
melentang badan kaku mengadap langit bilik..
terlihat kipas berpusing ligat..
begitu jua putaran kepalaku..
namun lidah terikat ketat..
suara terserap kontang..
hanya tangan mampu mengapai..
lantas pena bertemu kertas..
bagai hujan rintik di air tenang..
huruf jatuh membentuk tulisan..
mungkin ini tertulis untukku..
punya akal tak punya kuasa
punya hati tak punya cinta
punya nyawa tak punya jiwa..

p\s: i'm sorry i can't write well in english..so i prefer to express those feelings in malay..do please credit it well if u r going to share it..at least put my blog address..so that i may have more readers..^^

<3,
lilyenurainul